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The New Guy. Chapter 1 by ~Zxom11:iconZxom11:


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(i dont own yugioh, nor do i own the picture in this. i did write this tho. damned thing wouldnt let my upload it.. lemme know what u think)

“Oh great… I’m late!” He said as he got dressed quickly, not caring what he wore, as long as he had clothes on. “Shit! Shit! Shit! Where in the hell is my deck?!” He said yelling at himself. There is was, stuck half way in his dad’s old duel-disk. He picked it up and quickly skimmed through his deck, making sure all his cards were there. He put the disk on and bolted out the door saying goodbye to mom.

He got outside and ran as fast as he could; the Kaiba Dome was soon in full site as he didn’t live all that far away. Pretty soon he was almost there when he tripped on a rock and flew into someone. That other person was holding cards which flew everywhere. The other person was tall and blonde. “Hey, why don’t watch where you’re goin’ ya mook!” The person said with a slight New York-ish accent.

“I am so sorr-Hey I know you! You’re…” He started to say when the fact that he was extremely late popped into his head. He quickly leaned down and helped pick up all of the cards, apologized again and bolted away, with a dumb grin. He’d just met a dueling celebrity. He finally got to the Dome and went inside, when he realized that his shoe was untied. He bent down and saw that there was a card stuck to the bottom of his shoe. He carefully pealed it off and saw that it was the Red-Eyes B. Dragon! He had inadvertently stolen that guy’s best card! “Damn… Well I’ll just use it for this duel and when it’s over I’ll return it to him…” He said with a grim look on his face. He stood up and cleaned off the card and slid it into his deck.

He stepped inside the illustrious Kaiba Land Duel Dome, which was filled to the rim with people in Red, Yellow and Blue jackets. He walked over to two girls in Yellow-necked jackets, and asked if he could still sign up. He was lucky as hell that they were just about to go in; he signed up and went in with them. He walked up to the top of the bleachers and sat down alone. He didn’t have many friends, at least not many good ones.

Suddenly a large guy wearing a black leather jacket sat down on the row not far from him. He looked at the guy and shivered slightly. “WOULD JOHN RAEPHEN PLEASE REPORT TO THE DUELING AREA?!” Screamed the boom mic. He sighed lightly, stood up, and went down the stairs. His face was all over the screens at the top of the building and the one outside.

He started to feel sick as he shuffled his deck and slid it into his disk. He hit the switch that turned on his old Chaos disk. It was teal-ish green color, and had special runes around the Deck Zone. The front-most part swung off and the side and the Monster and Spell and Trap card Zones with a “ting” sound at each section. He swore that every time he activated this disk the little green stone around his neck lit up, but he thought he was just imagining things. “So if I beat you, I can join your school? He asked the proctor.

“Yes, but only if you can beat me and it won’t be easy.” Replied the Proctor.

“If you say so…” He said as he set his disk to 4000 Life Points.

“No, we play 6000, now son!” The Proctor stated with a smirk on his face as people in the crowd started laughing.

He started sweating. “G-game!” He yelled as he drew six cards. He looked at his hand, and noticed he had a slight strategy now. “Okay! I’ll start by setting a face-down card and a monster in defense!” John said as the cards appeared before him. “I’ll end my turn.”

Someone called out from the crowd. “What is this, Pre-dueling-school?!” Most of the crowd erupted in laughter.

The Proctor looked unphased, and didn’t say anything about it. He drew his six cards. He set three cards face-down and a monster in defense. “That’s all. Go.” He said to John. John drew his card. It was the Flute of Summoning Dragon, which wasn’t all that useful as of now. John set another monster face-down and ended his turn. It was the Proctor’s turn as he drew. “I summon the Gemini monster, Goggle Golem!”

It appeared with an original ATK of 1500. Nothing too big and bad, but it had an effect. “Now, I’ll activate Goggle Golem’s special effect, which allows me to re-summon him to gain ATK until he reaches 2100! Goggle Golem, attack his face-down monster, with Rock Smash!”

The first monster John had set was a Sangan, which was destroyed. “My monster was Sangan, and when he is destroyed I’m allowed to take a monster with 1500 or less ATK from my deck and add it to my hand!” He took out his deck and looked through it, and pulled out the Troop Dragon. He then shuffled his deck. The Proctor looked at his hand and ended his turn. John drew. It was the Lord of D.! “That’s a useful card, but I’ll save him till later.” He thought to himself. He set his Troop Dragon and ended his turn.

The Proctor drew. “I’ll sacrifice my defense monster for another one! And Goggle Golem will attack your other face-down monster!” Goggle Golem rushed at the card and destroyed the face-down Penguin Soldier.

“You’ve destroyed my Penguin Soldier, and when he’s destroyed while face-down, I can send two monsters on the field back to the owner’s hands and I choose both of your monsters!” He called happily as the Goggle Golem and the face-down monster vanished.

“I’ll end my turn.” The Proctor said with no emotion.

“My turn!” John said happily. He drew, and to his surprise it was the Red-Eyes B. Dragon! “Ill summon the Lord of D. then activate The Flute of Summoning Dragon! And with that I’ll summon the Masked Dragon and the Red-Eyes B. Dragon, but that’s not all, I’ll activate the Premature Burial card and pay 800 Life Points, to summon back the Sangan, then I’ll flip up my face-down Troop Dragon!”

The Proctor’s face sunk. “I’ll activate two face-down cards! Mystical Space Typhoon and the Dust Tornado! Both your Premature Burial and your face-down cards are gone.”

“Thanks!” John smirked. “Now I get Sangan’s effect again! And I’ll take the Exiled Force and add them to my hand. Now my monsters will attack directly! Troop Dragon! Lord of D.! Masked Dragon and my Red-Eyes B. Dragon will attack with Inferno Fire-Blast!” Leaving the Proctor with 300 Life Points, John smirked. “This duel is mine!” He thought to himself. “Go.” He said as the Proctor drew, set a monster face-down and ended his turn. “Great it’s my turn again!” He said happily. “I’ll activate the Gravekeeper’s Servant, though I doubt it will do me a lot of good.” He said smiling. “Now, I summon the Exiled Force, and then activate their effect, which allows them to destroy one monster on the field at the cost of themselves! Next, I’ll move Masked Dragon, Lord of D. and the Troop Dragon to defense mode and have my Red-Eyes attack directly!” He said as the dragon reared up and shot a massive red blast at the Proctor, knocking him backwards and sending his cards everywhere!

The monsters and cards all vanished, as John walked over to the Proctor and helped him up. “You had a great game. Welcome to Duel Academy!” The Proctor said as the stadium erupted in applause and cheers.

Outside, the blonde-headed celebrity smiled after watching John’s duel and walked away.
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OMG,this is like the Joey version of YGO GX instead of Yami with Jaden.Neither the less a cool story!Can't wait for more!

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Teh dragon gang!/Crazy trio:Lava :chainsaw: Bomb :woohoo: Sparks :headbang: /Cooling trio:Aqua :plotting: Terran :greetings: Raze :blowkiss:
I'm OuRyuumon in dA's Digimon Crew.
red-eyes rules dude!

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YEAS IT DOES!!!!

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Teh dragon gang!/Crazy trio:Lava :chainsaw: Bomb :woohoo: Sparks :headbang: /Cooling trio:Aqua :plotting: Terran :greetings: Raze :blowkiss:
I'm OuRyuumon in dA's Digimon Crew.
heh

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As I walk through the valley of the shadow of death, I fear no evil...for I am the baddest mother-fucker there is!!
~The Wicked Jester

My Pokemon Diamond info
Name: Zom
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That was awesome :iconimhappyplz:

Oh, and when you submit a deviation, where it says 'Add Text' just click that and paste everything onto the box that comes up.

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The forest...its too quiet.
What happened to the birds?
The animals?
I can't hear any fish!

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づたら!!!
i was gonna but i like the idea i had, where i show the "main card" from the chapter

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As I walk through the valley of the shadow of death, I fear no evil...for I am the baddest mother-fucker there is!!
~The Wicked Jester

My Pokemon Diamond info
Name: Zom
Friend code: 000107402437
I was gonna say what McXhan had said, You idea seems unique and stuff, but when everything's kinda crowded in the Author's/Artist's Comments thing it looks crowded and somewhat sloppy, but that's just my opinion. Now listen as a fellow Fanfiction author I wanna help ya out, it may sound like I'm picking on you but I recieved worse critque on Fanfiction.net.

The story just seems to be copying the first GX episode, but instead og Judai you put your own character in there. That's fine an all, but to some people it may seem to them that you couldn't think of your own introduction so you just stole Judai's story.

Now, I can't write dueling scenes. But in various roleplays it seems like a GX fanfiction half the time so I write it like that, since people that aren't familiar with Dragons, Fairy, SpellCaster decks can know what the cards do and such. I generally don't use Dragonsso I had to go on [link] to find out about the effects of the monsters. But I'm glad that you somewhat picked cards that aren't used in many fanfiction, Sangan for example most fanfiction authors pick the pretty, cute, strong cards to try to make their OC awesome. The problem with the Dragon thing was the fact that pretty much every OC owns a Dragon deck and usues it.Damn this lag is pisssing me off so I mightr sound a bit more harsh than I'm trying to sound.

Otherr than that, it was pretty good for a first attempt, but that's just my assumption that it's your frist time writing fanfics.

Good luck with your writing.
well about the duels i dont just make them up on the spot i actually do them, like i physically use the cards

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As I walk through the valley of the shadow of death, I fear no evil...for I am the baddest mother-fucker there is!!
~The Wicked Jester

My Pokemon Diamond info
Name: Zom
Friend code: 000107402437

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